My Blog Comment on Paerata school's Blog. (Individual Student Blog)

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My Inquiry Planning Document

Edited and Formal Version of My Report on Stars

My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading/title:
is an interesting title (I might have[;l.ok.; phrased the title as a question.)
My opening paragraph/introduction:
says what my report is about in a clear way	X
gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification	X
outlines the main features of the subject	X
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)	X
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject	X
give detailed information (factual descriptions)	X
include specific, technical vocabulary	X
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)	X
may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points	X
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found	X

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Begin Writing Here:

Facts About Stars!

                                

Introduction

I will be writing a report of the different appearance, temperatures

and the life cycle of a star which is a hot ball of plasma.

The Life-Cycle of a Star

Gravitational forces pull a cloud of nebular together and the cloud spins into a disc shape. It spins for a few years as it gets faster and faster and faster until it forms a bright light in the middle, this is called a prototype star. As it continues to spin, suddenly a big bang with a blinding light occurs and there is a star. The life of a star is not very nice though, the gravitational forces that pulled it together will start to crush it, but the star burns helium (until it runs out that is) which creates the stage called the main sequence. The star burns helium to expand itself and fight against the gravity to equalise the pressure.

Types of Stars

The stars defy the laws of colour (just like fire). Red you would think is HOT, no it is the coolest type star, then there is yellow: medium, then green: hottish and last but not least blue the hottest. There are a few other complicated ones like E.g Yellow Gv2 Dwarf. Now the stages first type main sequence which is in the paragraph above, then giant super-giant which is when the have been around for a long time and has grown big, then dwarfs when the are running out of helium and are shrinking then finally a dead cold black ball.

Appearance

There is (listed in heat) Red, Yellow, Green and Blue stars. Here is a fact you probably wouldn't know: Did you know that stars do not twinkle? Stars appear as small dots in the sky that twinkle, but they only look as if they twinkle is that while the light travels through the layers of our atmosphere and there are small pockets of air that mess up the straight line of light so your eyes interpret this as twinkling.

Conclusion

So now we know what it is like being a star and the different stages and types. Here is a fun fact: There are over 500 billion stars which leaves over 100 billion and 200 billion galaxies, including our galaxy the Milky Way.

4/05/15 NR Speed-Write: My Report on Stars.

My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading/title:
is an interesting title (I might have[;l.ok.; phrased the title as a question.)
My opening paragraph/introduction:
says what my report is about in a clear way	X
gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification	X
outlines the main features of the subject	X
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)	X
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject	X
give detailed information (factual descriptions)	X
include specific, technical vocabulary	X
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)	X
may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points	X
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found	X

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Begin Writing Here:

Facts About Stars!

Introduction

I will be writing a report of the different appearance, temperatures

and the life cycle of a star which is a hot ball of plasma.

The Life-Cycle of a Star

Gravitational forces pull a cloud of nebular together and the cloud spins into a disc shape. It spins for a few years as it gets faster and faster and faster until it forms a bright light in the middle, this is called a prototype star. As it continues to spin, suddenly a big bang with a blinding light occurs and there is a star. The life of a star is not very nice though, the gravitational forces that pulled it together will start to crush it, but the star burns helium (until it runs out that is) which creates the stage called the main sequence. The star burns helium to expand itself and fight against the gravity to equalise the pressure.

Types of Stars

The stars defy the laws of colour (just like fire). Red you would think is HOT, no it is the coolest type star, then there is yellow: medium, then green: hottish and last but not least blue the hottest. There are a few other complicated ones like E.g Yellow Gv2 Dwarf. Now the stages first type main sequence which is in the paragraph above, then giant super-giant which is when the have been around for a long time and has grown big, then dwarfs when the are running out of helium and are shrinking then finally a dead cold black ball.

Appearance

There is (listed in heat) Red, Yellow, Green and Blue stars. Here is a fact you probably wouldn't know: Did you know that stars don’t twinkle? Stars appear as small dots in the sky that twinkle, but they only look as if they twinkle is that while the light travels through the layers of our atmosphere and there are small pockets of air that mess up the straight line of light so your eyes interpret this as twinkling.

Conclusion

So now we know what it is like being a star and the different stages and types. Here is a fun fact: There are over 500 billion stars which leaves over 400 galaxies including our galaxy the Milky Way.

My Word Cloud and Writing about the Moon. (Including Self-Assess)

In Week 6 of Term 2 our class focussed on how to write great explanations.We wrote about the Moon’s different phases as we are in the middle of learning about Planet Earth and Beyond. Learning how to write a great explanation will help us with our self-guided topics in a few weeks time. Here is my writing, after I have self-assessed and peer-assessed my work.

INTRODUCTION

If you are wondering why the Moon changes every night, the reason is that the Sun’s light reflects onto the Moon and creates the different phases that we see.  In my explanation, I will talk about the orbit of the Moon around the Earth as the earth rotates on it’s axis as it orbits around the sun.

1st PARAGRAPH

The Sun’s light shines onto the Moon’s surface and when the Moon orbits the earth we see more or less of the of the illuminated side every night so that makes the phases of the Moon. Furthermore, the names of the phases of the Moon (in order) are: New Moon, Waxing Crescent, First Quarter, Waxing Gibbous, Full Moon, Waning Gibbous, Last Quarter the Waning Crescent then the cycle repeats.

2nd PARAGRAPH

The Moon takes around 27.3 days to orbit the sun but since the earth orbits the sun and is moving at the same time it takes around about 2 more days to get back to the same spot it was before. Some think that the phases of the moon are caused by the shadows of the earth, but the phases are actually caused by the sun's light it reflects.

CONCLUSION

Therefore, the shadows and light of the moon are not generated by the moon. The phases are caused by the moon reflecting light from the sun and us seeing less of the illuminated side as the moon orbits us, changing our perspective to make the phases. (Fun Fact) Did you know that people once thought the moon was made of cheese? I hope this explanation encouraged you to write your own.

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My Explanation Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading:
is the question WHY DOES THE MOON LOOK DIFFERENT EVERY NIGHT?	X
My opening paragraph/introduction:
introduce what my writing is about in a clear way	X
hooks the reader	X
clear topic sentence and supporting sentences	X
2-3 sentences maximum	X
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
clear topic sentence and supporting sentences	X
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject	X
give detailed information (factual descriptions)	X
include specific, technical vocabulary	X
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)	X
connectives and time connectives	X
descriptive language	X
formal language	X
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points	X
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found	X
write an interesting fact	X